i come to the water

more poem notes (or maybe an early, early draft of a poem) on this thursday...

I come to the water
to breathe in
salt,
hope,
shadows
I come to the water
to remember
her laughter
I come to the water
because I fear
forgetting
everything
I come to the water
to open
a space
inside me
I come to the water
to find
pieces of the past
I come to the water
to grieve
I come to the water
to let go
I come to the water
to seize life

head on over to jillypoet's for another thursday of the traveling poetry show...

Comments

[tumblewords]

Soothing poetry - water is a healer and this piece exudes hope and healing. Nice images!

[Hamguin]

Liz--I love this piece!

Even though I have never been there, I recognized Cannon Beach thanks to a current Cannon Beach resident, Lisa Evans.

[paisley]

definitely not rough,,, and not exactly what i would call a draft... an eloquently executed piece.. fini

[...deb]

"because I fear/ forgetting/ everything" caught at me.

I like the way this poem remembers.

[LJCohen]

Like a prayer or a mantra. Lovely.

[april nance]

your writing is filled with beauty, insight and strength-I love this poem. here i am nestled in the mountains and i could still smell the salty air and hear waves crashing.

[Lisa]

This is a beautiful poem - I think it's nice, as is. L

[Maithri]

Wonderful words,

Peace to you, M

[polka dot witch]

your repetition of the line "i come to the water" makes this feel like waves coming in in in at the beach. you'll definitely get a poem out of this!

[Colorsonmymind]

This is beautiful as is....


XOXO
love you

[wendy]

I love your choice of salt first.

This choice, brought me to the water..to that place with you...so I could go on the journey.

nicely done.

[Michelle (a.k.a. la vie en ros]

liz this was truly beautiful!